John of The Book Mine Set reviewed this story back in April, 2010. I had added it to my TBR and finally read it last night.
The Yellow Eye is written like a type of urban legend. Willow, an 11 year old girl has been on the road all day with her father when they run out of gas. Her father sees lights up ahead and tells Willow that he is going to walk there to try to get help. She is afaid to stay in the car alone but he tells her to go to sleep and that he would be back soon. Soon she spots a wolf that comes to try to get into the car through the windshield and then..
What happens seems to be a product of the girl’s wild imagination, but is it? Brayden Hirsch writes a creepy story that reminds me of stories we use to tell each other, as children at slumber parties. You know the ones, where the flashlight comes out and you know it’s time for scary stories.
I can certainly see this story working for children at a slumber party but for me, there was too much suspension of belief involved to begin with. What responsible parent would leave his terrified 11 year old alone in a car, rather than bring her with him. Also, he left the trunk open and didn’t even tell her to lock the doors. Other than that, Hirsch did a great job bulding up the tension to the climax.
Unfortunatly, the story doesn’t appear to be available on the internet any longer. The author’s wordpress blog is gone.
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I’m with you on doubting the believability of leaving the frightened child in the car! Does sound like a good slumber party story, though.
.thanks for sharing
Oh yeah, slumber party and camp out stories, those were always the worst/best! The oral tradition continues doesn’t it? Urban legends spread so quickly today.
Not sure I’d want to read this — I was never good with scary stories at slumber parties 😉